Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.
It is often argued that many
people
believe that the internet
has a lot of advantages but at the same time, it causes many problems in society. I strongly agree with this
statement because the internet
has no barrier
and can increase the new way of crime.
Fix the agreement mistake
barriers
Firstly
, the internet
is an open space that all people
of all ages, generations, and backgrounds can access. Besides
, it is allowed
them to share everything that they want and there are no limitations. Wrong verb form
allows
For example
, everyone can share their opinion on social media without any barrier, sadly sometimes they share their hate speech with others. Consequently
, some people
committed to
suicide. Even though there are many advantages of the Change preposition
apply
internet
, at the same time, no limitation can ruin someone's life.
Another reason is currently there are an increasing number of crimes on the internet
. In other words
, people
can buy goods through the internet
, however
, many people
experience a scam when purchasing online. For example
, in my experience, when I purchased an electronic device, I got fraud as the goods did
not Verb problem
were
send
once I finished the payment. Wrong verb form
sent
Hence
, the Internet
makes us more convenient but we need to be careful when using it, especially in an online transaction.
To summarize, even though some people
believe the internet
give
advantages, I strongly agree that it can cause harm to society because there are no boundaries, Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
as
a result, it increases the crime rate. As a user, we need to be wise and aware of using it, particularly in online businesses.Correct word choice
and as
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Task Response
Provide a clearer stance on the statement and ensure all body paragraphs support the main argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the structure of the introduction and conclusion to better present the main argument and the essay's major points.