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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
There
had
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 been many turnovers in terms
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of human’s
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human’s
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 lifestyle in many
cities
 all over the world. It is believed that the quality of life is declining in many big
cities
. There are causes that lead to
this
 problem and methods to solve it.
To begin
 with, the main cause of the life’s quality being affected is
due to
 noise and air pollution from
the
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transportations
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transportation
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. Nowadays, every
individuals
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own
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 a car and the quantities of
cars
 on
road
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the road
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had
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 been rising significantly. The usage of these transportations may lead to
increase
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 in carbon monoxide gas which
are
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 detrimental to health
especially
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 the respiratory system.
Moreover
, the honking sound from
cars
are
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 causing stress to mankind. There are myriads of solutions to tackle
this
 problem and one of the methods is by implementing the usage of electric
car
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cars
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 and
car pooling
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carpooling
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. Many modern technologies
had
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 created
cars
 that
uses
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renewable energies
such
 as
the
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electricity in order to reduce
pollutions
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pollution
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. When the amount of these previously stated harmful gases
are
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 reduced in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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, humans are able to breathe fresh and clean air that
are
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 free from pollutants.
Secondly
, businesses and organisations may encourage their employees to
imply
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 carpooling as a practice to reduce the amount of vehicles in many
cities
. The reduction of
cars
 may lead to a noise-free and cleaner air in large
cities
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 the main cause of the quality of life decreases is because of there is a rise in
usage
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the usage
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 of vehicles on
road
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the road
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 which can lead to breathing issues.
However
, it is crucial to take
actions
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action
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 in order to solve
this
 problem
such
 as carpooling and the use of electric
cars
.
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