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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

#media #influence #consumers
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Advertising
companies
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 these days are being very creative in order to attract customers to purchase their
products
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. Some believe that social
media
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 marketing is influencing the choice of
consumers
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,
however
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, there are other methods of advertising that may have the same effects.
Firstly
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, social
media
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 is widely used and most
companies
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 are using
this
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 platform to advertise their
products
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. Mobile users who are usually engaged
to
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 these
media
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 are easily influenced to buy most of the advertised
products
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.
For instance
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, beauty
products
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companies
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 pick Facebook and
Intsagram
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Instagram
pages to promote
products
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 and target their preferred audiences
especially
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the
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female users. It is clear that using social
media
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 as a way of marketing may influence
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consumers
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 to buy certain
products
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. Even though social
media
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 may be very popular in terms of marketing,
televisions
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 marketing
do
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influence what
consumers
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 buy.
The fast
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 food advertisements,
for example
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, display colourful and tempting pictures of food and that can make the viewers
to
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purchase junk food. In spite of eating healthy
meal
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meals
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,
consumers
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 are influenced by attractive advertisements on television to buy their
meal
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. I partially believe that social
media
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 marketing influences what
consumers
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 buy as there are other
media
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such
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the
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television that could play
the
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 similar role. Advertising
companies
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are
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may attract
so
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many customers by displaying videos and pictures
in
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on
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 social
media
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as well as
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television
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on television
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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