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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

#media #influence #consumers
Advertising
companies
 these days are being very creative in order to attract customers to purchase their
products
. Some believe that social
media
 marketing is influencing the choice of
consumers
,
however
, there are other methods of advertising that may have the same effects.
Firstly
, social
media
 is widely used and most
companies
 are using
this
 platform to advertise their
products
. Mobile users who are usually engaged
to
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 these
media
 are easily influenced to buy most of the advertised
products
.
For instance
, beauty
products
companies
 pick Facebook and
Intsagram
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Instagram
pages to promote
products
 and target their preferred audiences
especially
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the
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female users. It is clear that using social
media
 as a way of marketing may influence
the
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consumers
 to buy certain
products
. Even though social
media
 may be very popular in terms of marketing,
televisions
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 marketing
do
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influence what
consumers
 buy.
The fast
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 food advertisements,
for example
, display colourful and tempting pictures of food and that can make the viewers
to
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purchase junk food. In spite of eating healthy
meal
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meals
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,
consumers
 are influenced by attractive advertisements on television to buy their
meal
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. I partially believe that social
media
 marketing influences what
consumers
 buy as there are other
media
such
 as
the
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television that could play
the
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 similar role. Advertising
companies
are
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may attract
so
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apply
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many customers by displaying videos and pictures
in
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on
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 social
media
as well as
television
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on television
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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