Doctors should be responsible for educating their patients about how to improve their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are discovering new medicines and treatments for
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are also witnessing
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witness that
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as
there
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life style
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are changing. Many
people
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on
responsibility
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the responsibility
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of
doctors
like
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whether they
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should teach their patients
about
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apply
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how to improve their
health
. I am not
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agree with
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statement.
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, no offence that some
people
are
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different
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the different
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by birth or nature defect in their
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.
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common
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for
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humans
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is getting sick
are
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their habits and lifestyle.
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though they
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know it is not good for their
health
.
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every one
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know exercise
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off for heath but
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ignoring it.
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, my friend
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to
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chips. now he is overweight and it's
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complication
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in his body. he
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the reality and still eats chips and
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doing
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any exercise
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, not only
doctors
but
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also
making efforts to bring awareness for
health
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people
. For
instant
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, many hospitals are holding the awareness for
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women
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and children.
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also
do camping in countries for
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health
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and hygiene.
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, very few
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are
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just give the medicine when
patient
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patients
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come and
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explain why they get sick or how to prevent in feature. If they give
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information
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of information
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about
patient's
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the patient's
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condition and explain how it
happen
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, it will bring awareness
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them. To
be conclude
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, habits and lifestyle
are plays
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vital
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role
for
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our
health
. Government and
doctors
are helping us, how to become and live
healthy
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a healthy
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life but it is
individual's
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the individual's
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responsibility to follow the advice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic approach
  • preventive measures
  • chronic diseases
  • medical interventions
  • healthcare professionals
  • consultations
  • dietitians
  • health educators
  • literacy skills
  • visual aids
  • digital tools
  • reputable online resources
  • community programs
  • ongoing support
  • patient outcomes
  • initial guidance
  • mitigated
  • follow-up consultations
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