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Prisoners should be sent to prisons for crimes committee. What's your opinion

#prisoners #prisons #crimes #committee
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In modern
society
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, the majority of
society
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 believes that
person
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a person
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 who broke the law they should be sent to jail for
crimes
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 committed. I firmly stand that prisoners should take their criminal responsibility and be separated from other
society
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.
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 of all,
society
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 should have a common sense of rule for everyone has to live equally. That means, every person can have their own responsibility and is
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 protected by the law.
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, if someone made wrong actions to harmed onto other
people
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's lives, that should be punished by judgement and sent to prison. Because if someone's crime was proved by a judge,
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, when taken human
life
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 would have been punished, that can save a number of
people
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's
life
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.
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, bad
people
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 can lead to a bad influence on the community. If there is someone who has had actions in
broken
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 the law financially, physically or mentally, not
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sent to prison, it might be impacted other
people
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's decent
life
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.
People
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 cannot feel safe which
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has
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 led to huge confusion in
society
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.
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, it would lead to wrong influence on other
people
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's
life
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.
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, if there is a number of
crimes
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 not getting punishment, citizens might be stopped believing in their safety
life
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. In conclusion,
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 there are many types of
crimes
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 who would be involved they should be sent to jail and should be punished which in turn reduces the number of
crimes
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 in
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrent
  • Restorative justice
  • Economic viability
  • Sentencing
  • Criminal behavior
  • Psychological support
  • Public safety
  • Human rights
  • Correctional facility
  • Offender
  • Punitive measures
  • Crime prevention
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