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Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce poverty in the world. Others say economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people say that economic
development
 is necessary to reduce
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poverty
povert
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poverty
 in the world. Others say economic
growth
 should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Development
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 of a country or nation is necessary. According to
few
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a few
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 individuals
development
 in
economic
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the economic
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 sector is important to decrease scarcity, while
other group comment
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 that economic
growth
 should be banned
instead
 of harming
environment
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the environment
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. I opine
to
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on
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 the necessity of economic
development
 owing to the reasons given below. Analysing the previous opinion, the main
arguments
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argument
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 that would be put forward is unemployment.
This
 is because through improvement in
economy
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the economy
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 jobs would increase and
thus
 poverty can be reduced.
In addition
, they
also
 believe that economic
growth
 affects
environment
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the environment
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,
resources
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and resources
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 will be overused.
On the contrary
, the latter view
suggest
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 that
growth
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the growth
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 of
economy
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the economy
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 requires space for infrastructure
this
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which
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destroying
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destroys
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 the habitat.
For instance
, flats are built for economic purposes
inturn
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in turn
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affects
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affecting
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 natural resources. In conclusion, I would say that economy should grow for better
development
. It is the most appropriate way to deal
the
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 situation.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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