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the growh of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. do you agree or disagree?

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The growth of online shopping is believed ,by numerous people, will one day result in the closing of all
store
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 in towns and cities. Personally, I am totally against
this
 idea because both store and
the
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online shopping still have some advantages and disadvantages. In recent years, there were a significant increase in online shopping. It s not only an increase in the values of
property
 exchange but
also
 a various
kind
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 of
property
 which be sold
such
 as clothes, food or high-class jewellery. Online shopping is flexible, so it is suitable for people who lack s time
,
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 or live far from shops. It is
also
 easier for customers to compare the price of
property
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 or write a review for others. It may not need a real estate locations which may cost rented money.
On the other hand
, the store
are
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 located in a fixed position with real estate. It cost more money for investment so the
property
 may have higher prices.
Besides
 these disadvantages, people who come to shops will have more
experience
 with the
property
. They can feel it by touch,
my
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 the nose, and they can easily compare those. They believe that buying a good is an
experience
 with both sense and logic. Inclusion, It is true that there is an obvious increase in online shopping in many ways, and in the future, most
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the
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goods will be sold online.
However
, buying a good sometimes is an
experience
 with both sense and logic and the good way to get
this
experience
 is going and find it in the shops.
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