IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

#behavior #lack #respect #measures
The table illustrates the railway network that was started in London,Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angelos in different years and the distance it travelled and the number of passengers it carried. Overall, Kyoto is the city in which the smallest
route
 was constructed and the minimum number of
people
 travelled, whereas the maximum number of
people
commuted
Change the form of the verb
commuting
show examples
 by train in Tokyo while the longest rail network was led in London.
To begin
 with, the London railways came into commencement in the
year
 1863. The
route
 covered 394 kilometres and 775 million passengers commuted every
year
.
However
, in Paris, more passengers
travelled
Wrong verb form
travel
show examples
 yearly with the half
route
 to be covered. With the establishment of railways in Tokyo city in the
year
 1927, 1928 million
people
 started to commute for their work every
year
. Even though 128 kilometres of the
route
 was constructed for the Washington DC train, only 144 million
people
 travelled by it.
Nevertheless
,the smallest
route
 was constructed in Kyoto and Los Angelos(with 11 and 28 kilometres respectively, the
people
 who travelled by train remained on the higher side in Los Angelos.
Submitted by meghaseth20 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anti-social behavior
  • Lack of respect
  • Instilling values
  • Discipline
  • Supervision
  • Media influence
  • Behavioral issues
  • Moral education
  • Community engagement
  • Economic disparity
  • Frustration and alienation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: