Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems, Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourgae people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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expensive will not mitigate the issue and will even impact

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the economy of one country since all of the products are connected with each other financially and making one particular product costly will unbalance the structure of

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keep buying and eating even if they have to pay more. At the same

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which was replaced by work hours. If those foods got expensive, they would work more to compensate for that problem and

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at least a sense of knowing not to eat manufactured

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from experts to solve serious problems.

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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people like to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Is it a good thing to spend leisure time with colleague?