Some people feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In
this
modern world, due to
globalization
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the trade of edibles between
nations
is drastically increased. Some global affairs departments claim that
nations
should curb eatables imports by growing their own
food
. In my perspective, the reason for their viewpoint,
may be
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to reduce dependency on other
countries
for meals;
however
, in my
opinion
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it
have
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more drawbacks that are explored in the below
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paragraphs
paragraph
. To commence with,
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a plethora of reasons to support in-house
food
production
such
as less dependency and
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more employment are
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top
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the list.
First
and foremost, when
nations
start self-production of groceries they no need to import these goods from foreign
countries
which
curbs
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huge import taxes.
For example
, every year the
Canada
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government spends more than 10% of
annual
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budget on importing edible goods.
Moreover
, relying on others may lead to
food
scarcity during wars, natural disasters, or global conflicts. To avoid,as a precaution, authorities could make self
sustainbility
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sustainability
arrangements by motivating farmers to grow as per local demand,
as a result
, that not only curbs imports but
also
provides more jobs in
agriculture
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sector.
On the other hand
, most
countries
across the globe
depends
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on other
countries
for their
food
because they do not have proper infrastructure and supporting weather.
To begin
with, some
countries
might have fertile soil but they should import fertilizers, machinery and chemicals from their neighbours which is more expensive than importing groceries. As an
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the Srilanka imports all fertilizers from Canada as they do not have manufacturing units.
In addition
to infrastructure, most
countries
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countries'
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climate
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do not support all types of crops
as a result
they
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receive
received
recieve
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receive
them from other parts of the world. To illustrate,
the
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Canada is not suitable for growing dates as it requires
hot
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climate
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through out
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the year,
consequently
, they end up getting it from Dubai.
Finally
, to recapitulate, undoubtedly, it is a better idea to grow crops to
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fulfil
fullfill
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fulfil
local necessities rather than importing
it
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from friendly
nations
;
however
, in my
opinion
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due to the aforementioned reasons governments may not be able to implement
this
in a near future, it requires
economy
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the economy
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to build infrastructure and
technoloy
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technology
advancements to farm all crops in all weather.
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