41. Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separates rooms for work. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years,
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authority
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have planned to decorate their workplace with a new design. They are now intended to implement an open space
office
room, whereas it was
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door before.
However
, considering both the concepts, I agree that the facilities outway its drawback. I will provide
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in favour of my statement in the forthcoming paragraphs.
First
of all, the bare
office
environment will ensure honesty, accountability and transparency of any
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. very often we hear in some officers chambers is polluted by unfair means which will
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new
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designed
official form.
Moreover
,
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in
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wall free management system helps to allow common citizens to reach the boss of
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,
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is now too difficult.
In addition
, Decoration expenditure will
be decrease
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to make
general
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working station for different level officers.
For instance
, a huge
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amount
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amount
of money is now
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expense
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room
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for officers.
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chamber concept is should no
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longer for these reasons. Day by day, all the organizations need to deploy more and more employees in their
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, which leads to sitting crisis in offices. So we can provide more seats for newly appointed staff in open place offices.
Thus
work place
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will be more convenient and easier for service receivers as well as service providers. Fencing
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peoples
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mind confined
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a short area, but free space
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it
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broadness
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.
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,
employee
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, who works in a single chamber is more critical than that
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bare
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one. So we should damage all bindings of
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environment to ensure proper service to peoples. In conclusion, we can come to a
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decision that, fenceless big room have
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genuine
dedication to serve the nations than those of dark one. From the above
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it is proved that common rooms
office
facility outweigh its handicaps.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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