Educating young people is naturally important, however some think government ought to invest more in education for adults in need. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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in the academy are power. An increase in the academic ability of younger children and important.The federal

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should concentrate more on the younger population than the older citizens. I am of the opinion that the federal

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should focus more on the younger generation, in other to improve the academic standards than making efforts to improve the academic

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of the older citizens.

Teenagers

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are the leaders of tomorrow. Investing in the younger generation tends to promote the economic standard of the

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because they develop new technology that can promote the

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it is necessary for the

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to train

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than older

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. It is said that the youths are the future of tomorrow. Both the

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and parents are encouraged to be intentional about the academic background of

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instead

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of the

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paying attention to the

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of the older adult's academic

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, there should in other ways focus on training

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to be the best in

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educational background. Examples, training 60 years on

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in school

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and giving them free education.

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allowing the

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to be uneducated. It is known that

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older

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have shorter life to live than

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teenagers

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. So it is important to train them while young. And for

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to be great leaders tomorrow they need to be educated in order to meet the demands of the

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,hand it is very important to train and improve the academic

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of a child

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the

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makes efforts to improve the academic standard of older

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.

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is known that the learning abilities and capabilities have decreased over the years. It is known that in the new age are new things. I think that investments made in the lives of

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teenager will tend to increase the economy of the nation in the future.

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, when the youths are empowered through academic

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it enables them to make new investments and develop new technology.

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improvement

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leads to the development of the economy of the

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. In conclusion, I agree that it is more profitable to improve the academic

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of

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than that of older

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in the present

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makes the

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have a brighter future and it

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proves the economic standard of the

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.