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Topic: Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.

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A megacity has attracted hundreds and thousands of people to come because people believe that the big
city
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 has the best
resources
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.
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, a big
city
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also
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 has some disadvantages. My reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. Let's talk about the advantages
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, there are more
job
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 opportunities in a big
city
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 than in a small town. A big
city
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 is invariably populous;
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, more jobs are demanded to deal with the enormous requests. Take my cousin as an example. Our town is a small
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next
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 to
Shanghai
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, and the
job
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 market there is quite small;
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, it is not easy to find a suitable place there.
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, he moved to
Shanghai
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years old, and he found an ideal occupation there promptly. As a consequence, it can be concluded that the bigger the
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's scale, the more
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 opportunities.
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, big cities consistently have the best
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,
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 as education
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 or medical
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, I grew up in China and it's well known that all the best universities and hospitals are located in either Beijing or
Shanghai
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. I have been to one of those best hospitals in
Shanghai
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 once with my mother. The journey was exhausting because we took the train early to be there on time.
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, I was thinking, were I to live in a big
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, everything would be easier.
On the other hand
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, living in a big
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 has some disadvantages.
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, life in a big
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 is stressful.
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, every day you wake up, you need to think about how you can do better to keep your
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 and not be fired. For children, the competition is
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 fierce; they need to hard overly hard to get a place at a good university.
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, a big
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 consistently is environmental-unfriendly. Take Beijing as an example; Beijing has severe air pollution nowadays, the sky in Beijing is enveloped by heavy smoke, and residents haven't seen stars for years.
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, people can suffer from illnesses,
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 as coughing or dizziness from smoking that polluted air. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of living in a megacity.
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