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The below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

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The pie chart is a comparison of the
population
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 of an Asia county
Yemen
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 and a European country Italy. Both countries' populations in the year 2000 and it forecasted for the year 2050. In 2000, half of
Yemen
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's
population
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 are young
people
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 , and in Italy, one-quarter of her
population
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 are youth. The old
people
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 are the least in number in both
Yemen
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 and Italy. By 2050, there will be lesser children in Italy than in
Yemen
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, while, the elderly will be higher in Italy than in
Yemen
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.
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 with, in the year 2000,
Yemen
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 had 46.3% of children, 3.6 are adults 50.1 % are old
people
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 above 60 years. Comparing these to Italy at the same period, 24.1% are toddlers below 14, 14.3% are adults, and 61.5% are adolescents and adults of productive age. Hitherto, the forecast shows that
Yemen
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 will have a growing
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 of young
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 between 0 to 59years and a paltry old
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 of 5.7%. Meanwhile, the percentage of old
people
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 will increase from 24.1% to 42.3% during the period under review.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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