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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cost serious social problems as well as practical promlems. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believed there are serious personal and societal challenges that immigrants face due to the language barrier in a foreign country.
However
,I partially agree with
this
 statement and will explain why in
this
 essay. On the one hand, communication is the key to inter relationship and when
this
 is deficient it can result in mishaps because there is a breakdown in the transmission of information.
For instance
,a lady who does not speak Spanish but had to go to a Spanish-speaking country for academic purposes might find it hard to relate with the lecturer's intonation and speaking skills during learning in class. She might even have no friend to relate with which eventually lead to an inferiority complex because of her inability to speak their terminology.
Additionally
,imagine a nurse who could not speak expressly or understand the prose of the patient. She might not be able to deliver the best nursing care to her patients and her patients would be at risk of her inability to relate to her needs.
Furthermore
, there are good job opportunities that only the citizens of the country are eligible to get thereby leaving the non-citizens to do a job of low income which would not even be enough to meet daily needs.In short,foreigners are now left at the mercy of their host.
This
 is quite unfortunate and disdainful.
On the other hand
, there are measures that are put in place to make it easy for foreigners who have accent disabilities to enhance their living.
For instance
,the use of an interpreter in the market square,churches,mosques and so on enables immigrants who do not understand their dialect to be able to still interact with the environment and with the people. To conclude,I partially believe expression can be a barrier and can lead to fatal problems which must be tackled to help improve the standard of living of every citizen.
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