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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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There is no iota of doubt that nowadays more firms purchase eatable things from different parts of the globe. It has made people’s lives a bed of roses,
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 sometimes it opens a pandora’s box. The following paragraphs would highlight the merits and demerits of the same. There are a few benefits which people enjoy with
this
 concept.
Firstly
, by importing
food
 from different parts of the world,
countries
 provide a wider range of
food
 to their society.
As a result
, people can buy numerous varieties of
food
 from supermarkets and groceries at a cheap price.
Secondly
, it helps to offer more job opportunities to the nation. Adding
further
 a couple of more thing some
countries
 cannot produce some sorts of
food
 and fruit in their nation due to weather condition,
therefore
,
therefore
 it is adiful for them since they do not have
food
 shortage by it and human beings can enjoy all kinds of
food
 without any worry. To exemplify it, there is a paradigm of importing Indian get kiwi fruit from News Zealand as it is not produced in India due to harsh weather.
Lastly
, most
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industries purchase
food
 in bulk at a reasonable price and after importing they sell it to consumers at higher prices. Which helps to boost profits of the business.
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 the flip side of the coin, there are some inevitable drawbacks associated. Pollution is increased by importing
food
 from other nations since the state uses many transportations for it
such
 as trucks and planes. Which is harmful to our environment.
Moreover
, it is not a healthy
food
 for the community as while importing from other
countries
, used harmful chemicals for it, since these chemicals help to increase the shelf life of
food
.
In addition
, importing vegetables and fruits from other
countries
 consumes more time and money. So, the economy of poor
countries
 is weakened. To recapitulate it, I personally feel that those pros outweigh the cons, so
this
 trend should be promoted for the betterment of humanity.
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