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Some people say that the studying at school is not important because the most important things are leant outside the school. Do you agree or disagree

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The diagrams reveal developing and industrialized citizens’ participation
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 the areas of education and science in two time periods, 1980 and 1990. Overall, in 1990, people who live in industrialized
countries
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 were educated more highly and made more
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 the sciences
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compared to 1980, as did developing citizens.
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, the figure for industrialized nations
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 higher than the amount for developing
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. In terms of schooling years, during the same period, the growth in the developing areas at almost 1 %, which was 1% lower than the difference for developing areas. For the increased amount of scientists and technicians, industrialized regions accounted for about 30% of 1000 people and it was three times as compared to the increase for developing regions, at 10 % of 1000 people. With regards to expenditures which invest
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 research, in the same ten years, while industrialized
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 went up rapidly from $150 to $ 350, developing
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 declined slightly by $25.
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