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Many manufactory food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, Which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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For many people,
sugar
 is an unhealthy product that they can't get away with and to get rid of
this
 problem, we need to raise the price of all
sugar
. In
this
 essay, I will either agree or disagree with
this
 statement and express my opinion.
Firstly
, I will write about how the increase in the price of
sugar
 will affect the cost increase for all other products and
secondly
, I will talk about why people need to have self-control in order not to consume
sugar
 excessively and why it will be useful.
To begin
 with, Perhaps sweets are harmful to the body, but raising prices for them will not get rid of
this
 problem. The population will simply start wasting more money. And
besides
, most healthy foods, albeit in small quantities, contain carbohydrates.
For example
, in
such
 as bread, sausage, and sausages. It is just as much a flavour enhancer as salt and doesn't have to sweeten the taste of food. especially in small amounts, the body needs
sugar
 to improve metabolism As a rule, Some just can't take care of themselves and consume it in too many amounts. In
such
 cases, it becomes almost a drug, and
therefore
 it would be pointless to increase its figure.
This
 can give rise to huge aggression in the country.
For instance
, Throughout my childhood, I was very fond of
sugar
-containing foods and ate them in huge quantities,
this
 played a bad joke on me. I had a constant sore throat and an allergic rash.
In addition
, at one point, because of
this
, I fell into a critical state and ended up in the hospital. After
this
 incident, I completely stopped using sweets,
nonetheless
, after some time I again included them in my diet and use them strictly in limited quantities. In conclusion, I totally disagree with
this
 statement from the above facts
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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