The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are divergent views about
music
and how it affects each and
everyone
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of us.
certain
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individual
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individuals
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are of the opinion that
music
is a good way of
unite
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people
of different
age
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ages
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and
culture
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cultures
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together.
i
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completely agree
to
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this
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ascertions
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assertions
assertion
because
music
speak
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different
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language with various interpretations and can as well be used as a therapy. To start with,
music
is popularly know
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as the food of the soul, because
its
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speak different languages and interpretation in various ways that can send the
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same
the same
thesame
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same
meaning to different categories of
people
. The melody of a song speaks
volume
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,
people
read meanings to a song based on the interpretations gotten. take
for
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instance,The research that was carried out in
Backock
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Backpack
University
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department of
music
,
state
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states
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that, Religious leaders introduce
music
into their Church activities because songs melt the heart of the
people
before the sermon will be preached.
Furthermore
, harmonious songs have a cooling
effects
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on the heart of an individual, no matter how angered an individual might be, once the
person
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favorite
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song is playing the person tends to be calm. no wonder in
a
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the
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medical
fields
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music
is us as a therapy because it heals a broken mind and soul.
for example
,
neuro
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in neuro
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_ psychiatric
hospital
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hospitals
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,
music
is been used for the treatment of some psychological
disorder
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disorders
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like depression, bipolar disorder etc. to quicken the recovery processes. In conclusion,
There
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is
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no
doubts
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that
music
unite
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unites
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us together, despites, the age, cultural background,
religious
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or religious
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affiliations,
i
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I
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completely agree that songs have a calming
effects
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effect
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on our heart and communicate with us the way we will understand and as well can be used as a therapy.

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