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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cultures #work #organisation
There are divergent views about
music
 and how it affects each and
everyone
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 of us.
certain
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a certain
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individual
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individuals
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 are of the opinion that
music
 is a good way of
unite
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uniting
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people
 of different
age
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ages
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 and
culture
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cultures
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 together.
i
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I
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 completely agree
to
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with
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this
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these
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ascertions
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assertions
assertion
 because
music
speak
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speaks
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different
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a different
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 language with various interpretations and can as well be used as a therapy. To start with,
music
is popularly know
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is popularly known
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 as the food of the soul, because
its
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it
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 speak different languages and interpretation in various ways that can send the
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same
the same
thesame
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same
 meaning to different categories of
people
. The melody of a song speaks
volume
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volumes
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,
people
 read meanings to a song based on the interpretations gotten. take
for
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,for
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 instance,The research that was carried out in
Backock
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Backpack
University
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University's
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 department of
music
,
state
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states
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 that, Religious leaders introduce
music
 into their Church activities because songs melt the heart of the
people
 before the sermon will be preached.
Furthermore
, harmonious songs have a cooling
effects
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effect
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 on the heart of an individual, no matter how angered an individual might be, once the
person
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person's
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the favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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 song is playing the person tends to be calm. no wonder in
a
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the
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 medical
fields
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field
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music
 is us as a therapy because it heals a broken mind and soul.
for example
,
neuro
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in neuro
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_ psychiatric
hospital
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hospitals
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,
music
 is been used for the treatment of some psychological
disorder
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disorders
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 like depression, bipolar disorder etc. to quicken the recovery processes. In conclusion,
There
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there
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is
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are
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 no
doubts
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doubt
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 that
music
unite
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unites
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 us together, despites, the age, cultural background,
religious
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or religious
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 affiliations,
i
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I
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 completely agree that songs have a calming
effects
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effect
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 on our heart and communicate with us the way we will understand and as well can be used as a therapy.

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