You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job You should write at least 150 words.

Dear John, Hope you are doing good!. I am migrating to your country for higher studies. I need your assistance
for
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in

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finding a part-time job to do during my study. To give more details on
course
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the course

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, I have completed my
bachelors
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bachelor's

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in India and scored 7.5
band
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bands

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in
IELTS
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the IELTS

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exam,
as a result
, I got a seat in a foreign university to pursue my
masters
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master's

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in
Electronincs
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Electronics

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& Communication. Fortunately,
this
college is in the same location as
your's
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yours

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. As you are aware I am going through
financial
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the financial
a financial

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crisis. My family is not in a position to provide me
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with a

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a
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apply

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financial aid,
consequently
, I have to find a job not only for my expenses but
also
for college fees and other accommodation charges.
Moreover
, I am under
a
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apply

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medication which
are
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is

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very expensive
in
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apply

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overseas.
Last
but not the least, I need your help
me
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apply

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to find a part-time either you can recommend in your current restaurant or send me if you are aware of any openings.
Moreover
, Let me know if you find any recruiter looking for help with household chores or painting walls and
ceiling
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ceilings

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because
this
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these

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skills are my cup of tea. I will be waiting for your reply!. Yours lovingly, Raghu
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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