You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job You should write at least 150 words.

Dear John, Hope you are doing good!. I am migrating to your country for higher studies. I need your assistance
for
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finding a part-time job to do during my study. To give more details on
course
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the course
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, I have completed my
bachelors
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bachelor's
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in India and scored 7.5
band
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in
IELTS
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the IELTS
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exam,
as a result
, I got a seat in a foreign university to pursue my
masters
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in
Electronincs
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Electronics
& Communication. Fortunately,
this
college is in the same location as
your's
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. As you are aware I am going through
financial
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crisis. My family is not in a position to provide me
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a
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apply
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financial aid,
consequently
, I have to find a job not only for my expenses but
also
for college fees and other accommodation charges.
Moreover
, I am under
a
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medication which
are
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very expensive
in
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overseas.
Last
but not the least, I need your help
me
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to find a part-time either you can recommend in your current restaurant or send me if you are aware of any openings.
Moreover
, Let me know if you find any recruiter looking for help with household chores or painting walls and
ceiling
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because
this
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skills are my cup of tea. I will be waiting for your reply!. Yours lovingly, Raghu
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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