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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Owing to the belief in some quarters that it is a misuse of funds by the
government
 to invest in the
arts
 when
such
 could be effectively put to use in some other ventures, I am of the opinion that any
investment
 in the
arts
 is not a waste of money.
Firstly
,
arts
has
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 a way of bringing life to the very fabric that connects people together and
an
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investment
 in
this
 can be likened to an
investment
 in the quality of life which
thus
 suggests to one the premium a
government
 places on its citizens.
Furthermore
,
such
 investments
affords
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 people the opportunity to showcase their talents at a subsidized rate since the
government
 is already funding
such
 project. Another point to consider is the level of peace and excitement
such
investment
 is capable of providing,
for instance
 when a country is given the
rights
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 to host an international competition like the World Cup. It would be observed that there is a general ambience of calm and excitement amongst the citizens of
such
host
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 nation that tends to douse tension even among warring factions in
such
 country if any.
In addition
 to
this
,
such
investment
also
 presents a
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springboard
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spring board
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 for other businesses to be birthed and groomed. In conclusion, when a
government
 invests in the
arts
, it
unconciously
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unconsciously
 turns on a part of its citizens that has seemingly gone docile which makes them come alive and energetic. That cannot be said to be a waste but rather, a worthwhile
investment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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