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Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that several schools have organized regulations forbidding pupils to use their smartphones during the class
day
. While other people claim that
children
 should get permission to use their
phones
. Personally, it seems to me that the
phones
 are advantageous for
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 their class, yet I will discuss both of these cases. On the one hand,
children
 have several adverse effects from using their
phones
 during the school
day
,
such
 as lack of concentration and addiction. To show the evidence for
this
 case, they tend to consume their handphones many times and are likely to ignore what is substantial in their subject, which the teacher elaborates in front of them.
Also
, some of the pupils felt happier to see something funnier than what the teacher explained regarding the lessons at the time.
Therefore
, a few schools make an effort for declined utilizing
phones
 during the school
day
 to avoid several problems that can affect inimical their student.
On the other hand
, nowadays, smartphones are very effective for people who use those well. Many beneficial tools can make students helpfully in their lessons.
For instance
, many applications currently provide the advantage of things for
children
 to learn,
such
 as a dictionary. It is true that many features on the
phones
 are helpful for pupils who desire to study and increase their knowledge. So, I believe that using a smartphone during the class
day
 is an effective way rather than not using it anymore. To conclude, everyone has a way of studying and seeking the method to understand their subject. Handphone is not the only harmful thing for
children
 and their school because there are many benefits for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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