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Task 1 The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the exporting of
pineapple
global
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 by the top three
pineapple
-producing countries between 2009 and 2019,
moreover
 a breakdown of the price to the consumer of each
pineapple
 in 2019.
It is clear that
 there are three countries,
country
 A,
country
 B, and
country
 C, with metric tonnes showing the production of
pineapple
 export.
Overall
, the figures for
country
 A were the highest in 2019, and the lowest was in
country
 C in 2009.
While
 in the diagram, there are seven breakdowns of the cost to the consumer of each
pineapple
 in 2019. The highest was distribution & retail, and the lowest
were
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 export costs. In 2019, the proportion of
pineapple
 exports was more than ten
million
. It decreased enormously in every single
country
;
country
 C was about less than one
million
.
While
 in 2009, world
pineapple
 exports were about 1
million
 and increased noticeably to around 4,4
million
, but suddenly the metric tonnes declined by almost 0
million
. Distribution & retail were more than a
third
 and higher than others. The producer and taxes have a similar percentage. Those have a different proportion of around 2 %.
In contrast
, the others were about less than one in ten.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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