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Task 1 The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the exporting of
pineapple
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global
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 by the top three
pineapple
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-producing countries between 2009 and 2019,
moreover
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 a breakdown of the price to the consumer of each
pineapple
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 in 2019.
It is clear that
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 there are three countries,
country
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 A,
country
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 B, and
country
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 C, with metric tonnes showing the production of
pineapple
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 export.
Overall
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, the figures for
country
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 A were the highest in 2019, and the lowest was in
country
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 C in 2009.
While
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 in the diagram, there are seven breakdowns of the cost to the consumer of each
pineapple
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 in 2019. The highest was distribution & retail, and the lowest
were
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 export costs. In 2019, the proportion of
pineapple
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 exports was more than ten
million
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. It decreased enormously in every single
country
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;
country
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 C was about less than one
million
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.
While
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 in 2009, world
pineapple
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 exports were about 1
million
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 and increased noticeably to around 4,4
million
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, but suddenly the metric tonnes declined by almost 0
million
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. Distribution & retail were more than a
third
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 and higher than others. The producer and taxes have a similar percentage. Those have a different proportion of around 2 %.
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, the others were about less than one in ten.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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