Sport is one of the most popular draws on television today. some people argue that the practice of showing sport on television is to blame for the poor health of the young generation by encourage aging them to watch rather than take in physical activity. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays watching sports on television is a kind of leisure activity for various
people
. Some argue that it is a mode to the blame poor health of
young
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generation by encouraging them to watch rather than to take part in physical activities. I disagree
towards
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the proposed agreement in the question by illustrating some supportive points with relevant examples. Showing sport on television is one of the crucial
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of entertainment all over the world whether it is a Basketball game in US or Cricket tournament between the various countries held all over the world.
Hence
,
people
of the country are concerned related to the
parctice
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practice
and funding to form a team that will perform against other countries.
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, some
people
look
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sport
as
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a business perspective , they bid on the teams as
prediction
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to carry out
the
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huge amount of profits.
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, an application on
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referred
as
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'dream 11' is one of the bidding platforms where lots of
people
are
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enable
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to form a team by referring their friends to increase the contribution.
Furthermore
, Intervals during a play consists of the tips to stay fit by different
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world class
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players and
also
encourage viewers to join nearby academy available in their
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near by
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locality.
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, Virat Kohli is one
the
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elitest
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cricketers from India shares his daily routine consisting of fibrous diets which keeps them healthy and active throughout the day. In conclusion,
Younger
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generation is encouraged to stay fit by performing a regular
workout
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the
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people
of all ages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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