Some people think that goverment is wasting money on arts and thag money could better spent else where to what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that governments which spend
money
on arts
and culture
activities are criticized by their people, Replace the word
cultural
However
, I do agree that the government should has
a priority on spending tax-payer's Change the verb form
have
money
, I completely disagree with stop
funding Replace the word
stopping
arts
On the one hand, those public
who argue that the authorities should not financially support cinema or local T.V series , and they should go to enhance the education, health, welfare and military. those opponents have many Change the determiner
that public
evidences
to argue with. Change the wording
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
Firstly
, each government has limited resources comparing
to its costs, Wrong verb form
compared
secondly
, the public have
the right to ask the government when and where and which the appropriate plan to work with. Change the verb form
has
Finally
, they consider that celebrities gain huge money
for nothing and they should act or perform these works for a little amount of money
.
On the other hand
, supporting local culture and heritage is reflecting the face of society and introduce
the country as a tourism destination for others, Correct subject-verb agreement
introduces
therefore
, increasing the nation
income which is the most important target for any successful Change noun form
nation's
leaders
. Thug, Fix the agreement mistake
leader
many
job opportunities for graduates especially those who are studying and interested in Add a missing verb
are many
arts
. If we take the tourism as a
industry we should not consider Change the article
an
this
improvement absorb, whilst they argue of
which the perfect policy to adopt, they can see many successful vivid stories Change preposition
apply
To
sum up, Add the comma(s)
,To
arts
and other culture
activities are not wasting Replace the word
cultural
money
or time, it could be an important income resource.Submitted by abdoo.magicoo on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion