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Many would argue that scientific research requires a degree of oversight from the relevant governmental authorities. properly handled, this is a sensible and necessary policy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Supervision of responsible authorities in scientific research has always been debated.
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 some people do not agree with
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 oversight. I believe that there will be some necessary benefits and drawbacks to consider. On the one hand, the major reason that scientific studies need to be supervised is because of human safety.
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, there is some evidence in the past that underhanded
projects
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 will result in human injuries to both researchers themselves and people nearby.
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, another main reason for monitoring is
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to control the
project
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 budget
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 some
projects
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' benefits are not worth the cost that the government needs to spend .
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, to manage
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some
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 basic regulations and supervision are needed.
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, there are significant disadvantages of having government intervention
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 working on complex scientific research.
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, it is going to delay the
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,
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 procedures need to be implemented for monitoring.
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, the
project
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 will result in more financial needs.
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, if researchers are working on a small
project
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, they can work independently. But, many people,
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 as administrators
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 and receptionists, will be involved
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 will delay
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 and increase costs
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. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages of government intervention in scientific research. It is necessary to regulate and supervise human safety and control the budget, but both should not delay or over budget than it should be.

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Task Response
To do better, answer all parts of the question. Add more facts or ideas for each side. Give a short clear end line.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make the flow clear. Put one idea per paragraph. Use linking words like 'also', 'but', 'in addition' to show how ideas are linked.
Lexical Resource
Use easy word choice. Keep words simple and common. Avoid long or hard words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Check grammar. Use full sentences and fix run-on lines. Use 'is' and 'are' with the subject.
Task Response
Add clear examples that fit the topic, like safety rules or budget rules from the government.
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Clear idea of both sides
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Some good supporting ideas on safety and cost
coherence
Uses 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show contrast
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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