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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. What could be the consequences of this?

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SOME COMPANIES NOWADAYS WANT TO BE ABLE TO REACH THEIR EMPLOYERS AT ALL TIMES. WHILE IT MAY SEEM POSITIVE FOR THE COMPANY IN THE SHORT RUN,
THIS
 MIGHT NOT PROVE TO BE PRODUCTIVE IN THE LONG RUN. THE PROS AND CONS OF
SUCH
 A SYSTEM WILL BE THOROUGHLY ANALYSED AND DISCUSSED IN
THIS
 ESSAY BEFORE DRAWING A REASONED CONCLUSION.
FIRSTLY
, THE PRESENT WORLD IS VERY FAST-MOVING AND COMPETITIVE.
THEREFORE
,THE EXPECTATIONS OF AN EMPLOYER TO HAVE HIS WORKFORCE AVAILABLE TO HIM AT ALL TIMES ARE JUSTIFIED. CERTAIN DECISIONS MUST BE TAKEN AT THE RIGHT MOMENT AND
THEREFORE
 THE COMPANIES MUST BE ABLE TO CONTACT THEIR EMPLOYEES EVEN IF IT MEANS DISRUPTING THEIR VACATION.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THE PRESENT ECONOMY IS VERY UNPREDICTABLE AND AN OPPORTUNITY MIGHT OPEN UP OUT OF THE BLUE. EMPLOYERS SHOULD BE ABLE TO CONTACT THE CONCERNED STAFF TO CONSULT THEM TO GET THEIR EXPERT OPINION BEFORE MAKING A MOVE.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, WE ARE ALL HUMAN BEINGS AND WE ARE NOT DESIGNED TO FUNCTION NON-STOP. EVERY PERSON REQUIRES A GOOD UNINTERRUPTED BREAK TO UNWIND. WE ALL AGREE THAT WE REQUIRE A BREAK TO DISCONNECT OURSELVES FROM OUR HECTIC WORK LIFE AND GETTING A GOOD BREAK HELPS TO OPTIMISE OUR WORKING CAPACITY. WE ALL RETURN FROM A RELAXED VACATION WITH MORE ENERGY AND ZEAL TO PERFORM BETTER. DEPRIVING EMPLOYEES OF
THIS
 PRIVILEGE WILL LEAD TO A BURNED-OUT WORKFORCE NOT BEING ABLE TO FUNCTION AT THEIR BEST.
THIS
 WOULD BE OF GREAT LOSS TO THE COMPANY. IN ,CONCLUSION I WOULD POINT OUT THAT WHILE IT MIGHT SEEM IMPERTINENT FOR EMPLOYERS TO BE ABLE TO REACH THEIR STAFF AROUND THE CLOCK EVEN ON A WEEKEND OR HOLIDAY, IT HAS DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS ON THE PERFORMANCE CAPACITY OF THE EMPLOYEES. I WOULD PREDICT THAT EVEN THOUGH IT MIGHT
INITIALLY
 ENSURE THE OPTIMAL FUNCTIONING OF THE COMPANY IT WILL LEAD TO DECREASED WORK SATISFACTION WHICH IN TURN WILL AFFECT THE COMPANIES OUTPUT.
THIS
 CAN BE IMPROVED BY INCREASING THE NUMBER OF MEMBERS IN THE WORKFORCE SO THAT THERE ARE PEOPLE TO COVER FOR PARTICULAR HOLIDAYS.
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