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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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As the world population keeps growing, the opportunities continue shirking and
people
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 became more competitive. There is a statement that mentioned the concerning numbers of unemployment among highly qualified graduates in many countries.
This
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 essay will discuss the factors that may cause the distressing circumstance and the possible solutions.
Firstly
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,
students
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 graduated without working
experience
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.
Although
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students
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 may perform well in class, it doesn't mean they are capable of doing the job.
For instance
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, the management
students
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 may have a good understanding of management. Anyhow, they don't have actual
experience
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 in managing
people
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 and they don't have effective communication skills. Having these
students
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 in management positions may not be optimal for the company.
Secondly
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, the imbalance between
people
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 and
jobs
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. Many
students
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 enrolled in the subjects with the expectation that they will get a high salary once they got a job in the field they studied.
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,
students
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 thought that being a manager is a good position with a decent salary. But, they might forget the fact that there are more employees than managers within a company. They may fit the qualification of being managers, somehow, there is no need for a company to hire many managers. One of the great solutions for inexperienced
students
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 is to be an intern while pursuing their degree. Being an intern allows the student to put their knowledge into practice so that they will have enough
experience
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 once they graduated.
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, to tackle the imbalance between
people
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 and
jobs
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, the government and the school should frequently inform
students
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 about the job in demand and try to promote the subjects that have less enrollment. In conclusion, I think that the causes of unemployment for capable graduates are the lack of
experience
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 and no accurate balance between
people
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 and
jobs
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. In response to the causes,
students
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 should do an internship while studying and the government and the school should frequently inform
students
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 about the status of their
jobs
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.
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