In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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to nowadays, especially, many changes have
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occurred
occured
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occurred
in the field of business. One of the most noticeable points is the work
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between
males
and
females
. When it is compared to
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hours of men and women, due to the heavy business conditions, women commence obtaining more working burdens.
As a result
of
this
situation, both men and women have had to share the house needs in order to carry easier them. From my point of view, it is a reasonable solution to be responsible for home necessities
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same
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levels. If it is looked back at history, it is a quite
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distinctive
the job
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descriptions
description
for
males
and
females
. Generally, while
woman
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were in charge of house
missions
such
as cooking and cleaning,
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the man
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man
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had to bring money to meet
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family's
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requires
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.
In addition
to that,
woman
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were typical symbols of being
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a mother
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mother
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. Most of
their
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times
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, they were
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children. When it is reached our modern age, a great deal
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have emerged. Because, in the ways
of
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economical, it is not possible to fund the family expenses by only one member,
such
as
father
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. The most important reason is
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life expensiveness. By it is very
nature
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, as the father model in families works, now, mothers or
females
are expected to assist
to
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their families and
unfortunately
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this
transformation
is render
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to give up undeliberately some home
missions
.
However
, not only
females
but
also
males
are forced to help
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the woman
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woman
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. Compared to the past,
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today's
todays
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today
,
males
should share the home
missions
in
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equal levels with
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a woman
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woman
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women
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. To recapitulate, if the explanations and examples which are given above are analyzed, the best solution for families and individuals is that all
missions
should be distributed.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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