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Topic: Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.

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These days many
people
 prefer to settle down in modern
cities
. From my point of view, I think
people
 tend to move to big
cities
 to boost their prospective and their opportunities to find better jobs. Living in a major city has considerable advantages for
people
 who choose to stay in it. To illustrate, if seniors from smaller
cities
 have limited chances of working, they would get favourable opportunities in the big areas because industrial activities and projects are more in these
cities
 than in others.
Moreover
, multicultural is something unique in large
cities
.
For example
, London the capital of the United Kingdom, have a great variety of
people
's nationalities and they have their own cultures, traditions, and even different religion so, it is the best place for
people
 to learn the social coherence.
On the other hand
, living in a big city is extremely expensive ,especially for youngsters who are still in their early lives.
for instance
, one of my brothers moves to the capital of Saudi Arabia ,Al-Riyadh, after he graduated and he found a golden chance to work in one of the most famous companies there and he spend more than half of his salary just on the basic
such
 as the rent of his flat and the fuel of his car and from two years and up to now he still do not have any saving. To conclude, developed
cities
 are the focus of attention of young
people
 since they have tremendous benefits from all sides of their lives.
Submitted by SALMA.NASEEB on

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