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Using a computer every day can have more negative than postive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, everyone needs to
use
computers
 to finish our tasks in our daily life, which is included our offspring. They
also
 need to
use
 a
computer
 to complete their homework and online courses.
Thus
, digital equipment become an essential item in our society.
Hence
, I fully agree with using
computers
 might create certain negative effects on offspring. Let me illustrate my perspectives in the below paragraph.
First
 of all, the self-discipline abilities of
kids
 are weaker than compared of adults. In reality, young
children
 are addicted to games, which can affect their study schedules. In accordance to China newspaper, China Government needs to set up certain restrictions, which cannot provide games services to
children
 under 12 years old. Accordance to the research, young
children
 might spend over 6 hours per day on the
computer
 when they do not have any control. The news proves that
children
 lack self-discipline.
Additionally
, there are other potential hazards too. In research, there are two groups of
kids
. One group of
children
use
 digital items on a daily basis, and the other one uses less digital equipment. The concentration ability of the former one is lower compared with the latter. It is because brain development in
children
 has not been fully completed and over-exposure to videos hampers the development of
children
's brains.
Moreover
, once they are accustomed to videos, words in textbooks just seem too boring to them, which makes them impatient in their studies. In conclusion, we cannot avoid using
use
computers
 in our daily life.
Nevertheless
, it does not mean that
computer
 only has a negative effect on
kids
 that should be abandon
computer
 from childhood. We should teach
kids
, who need to behave self-discipline in using
computers
 to have fun.
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