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Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

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Nowadays, there are many
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 who want to be
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 popular
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 that they watch on the different types of media
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 as TV or Magazines,
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 topic and I express my idea about the positive or negative effects of
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 issue. On the one hand, with the progress of technology, we can witness many
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 who prefer to be famous and they want to watch different popular
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 like actors or singers in the order they put dress like them,
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, they think so, if they do not wear like them they will become an ordinary
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 they want to surgery their body due to being like them,
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,
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 can hurt them as well as they may suffer to another type of diseases,
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, in my country, as we see many
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 who are following their favourite actors and they want to be like them one day.
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, definitely,
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 is a detrimental aspect
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 not only they may be suffering a wide range of illnesses in the future but
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 they can not have a natural trend in their life,
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, they do not want to satisfy themselves anytime, because of, they will change all the time themselves when they watch a new style in the media,
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 when they want to copy their dress
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 famous actors they want to clear their personality and they can not increase their life quality and they always remain entitle a fan and likely they do not have a suitable time for flourishing them. In conclusion, I firmly disagree with
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 they want to spend all their time in order to copy their life from famous
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,
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 leads to they become a person who does not have an independent character.
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