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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #ability
Nowadays, education is
basic
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 need for all children. In that education department, there are ones
believe
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who believe
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 that
pupil
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pupils
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 should be
catagorised
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categorised
 according to their
knowledge
.There are some others who think all
students
 should be given
same
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the same
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knowledge
 without any difference
with
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 their academic
progress
.In my point of
view
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i
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 believe education must be delivered to all
students
 togetherly without any discrimination.
To begin
 with, when
students
 are grouped they won'
t
 experience sharing of
knowledge
 with others.
Moreover
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pupil
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pupils
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 in the same
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category
catagory
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category
have
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equal
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the equal
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 skill
set
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sets
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,
progress
 and other things.
Furthermore
due
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this
 interaction between the
students
 will become less so that they can'
t
 explore many things.
For
instance
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a
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a student
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students
 with good
progress
 will grow more in academics but his
involments
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involvements
involvement
 and sharing ability in
other field
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another field
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 will
gets
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 affected.
On the other hand
, when
students
 are gaining
same
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the same
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knowledge
 all together in the same
classrom
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classroom
 they can explore the skills which they don'
t
 know. To illustrate,
students
 with low academic
progress
 will be king in some other fields they can share their ability
to
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students
don'
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who don't
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t
 have
a
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knowledge
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knowledge
 regarding that.
In addition
, due to
this
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 a good and healthy friendship will begin. To sum up,
Students
 are lacking their helping , sharing tendencies and
also
 they are not exploring their
knowledge
 with others due to
this
 pupils should not be
seggreated
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segregated
 with their academics all should be treated in
same
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the same
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 way and enhance their
knowledge
all together
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.
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