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In the past,when students did a university degree,they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays,they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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 abroad nowadays compared to past times. Of
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 it is connected with
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overall globalization and there are
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 benefits as more precision in a
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 market, networking developed through the different counties and
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 to get
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 but there are
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 drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one
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 there are advantages to being educated overseas for the global world economy.
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, a person who decides to do so will gain fluency in language which will bring benefits for both the home country and the selected one.
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 will have an accomplished worker able to communicate with abroad professionals and share the experience.
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 country might have a professional
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 will stay and develop the economy for domestics, who was not decisive enough to finish
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 faculty.
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, the networking established between students will
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 between countries and professionals there. Which will significantly influence world development globally, international relations and other positive aspects.
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, for overall profit, the right people get the right
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 of
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 which may
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 in a technological breakthrough. Some brilliant minds had no chance to get higher
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 in the past but now the situation is slowly flattening out.
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, the idea of international studying has disadvantages affecting society overall. One issue is being homesick and
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 barrier, for
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 may lead to depression which might
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 in lower
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quality
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. Another difficulty is that in many counties the studies are not
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free and many attendees probably
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 to work and study at the same time but only
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 few of us are capable of being productive in entire fields at the same time, which is not the global rule. So what will be the profit of making universities open for foreigners if they are barely studying but depressed and struggling with
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 both countries will not have any profit neither capable specialists nor busy at science ones and the entire idea will be lost. In conclusion, while the positive aspects
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 to obvious advantages, it can
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 lead to lower
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 occupational people, and
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 of those who selected major to be developed into
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 and paid off
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International job market
  • Cultural exposure
  • Intercultural communication
  • Higher education standards
  • Specialized programs
  • Language proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Mental health challenges
  • Recognition of qualifications
  • Bureaucratic challenges
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