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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are various challenges when it comes to running the economy of one nation smoothly.
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 the change in certain rules is liable to look after the condition of the earth in future.
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, the international community should be responsive to warn all nations to decrease the consumption of fossil
fuels
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 as gas and oil. I lean towards the agreement of the statement by providing possible statements with relevant examples.
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, Innovation on a large scale demands lots of
energy
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 sources and some of the trials were successful that propulsion the economy of one country. They get used to it.
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,
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 lead to huge pollution in the environment that led to the interruption of natural climatic processes.
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, the overuse of fossil
fuels
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 in vehicles and electricity generation produced various thermal gases.
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, ice caps are now decreasing which is predicted by the rise of sea level.
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 rise in sea level will destroy the numerous natural habitats.
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, the transition is slow to get equipped with renewable
energy
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.
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 majority of the nation depends upon fossil
fuels
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 and natural gas which are used to produce 24*7 electricity. Some nations are rather successful in installing renewable
energy
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 acquiring devices which are totally eliminating pollution.
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, Solar panels are an effective way to get free
energy
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. Some parts of the US and India are now referring to
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 technology which is the result of the effective steps from the international community. There is
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rigorous research to run heavy vehicles and warships as the challenge as a sustainable alternative is not enough. In conclusion, consumption of fossil
fuels
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 is significantly reduced all over the world and many
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the nations have implemented renewable resources to take a stand toward sustainability.

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