Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
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adolescents
should be involved in Use synonyms
community
work during leisure time and that can benefit them and the Use synonyms
community
. I agree with the statement Use synonyms
as
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that
teenagers
can benefit by having Use synonyms
sense
of responsibility at Add an article
a sense
young
age and that may help reduce the Add an article
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rate
of juvenile Use synonyms
crime
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community
. By participating in social work, many young Add an article
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adolescents
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being involved
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their free
teenagers
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work tend to be more responsible to their Use synonyms
community
and country. Use synonyms
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such
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into
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adolescents
may possess a sense of responsibility towards their Use synonyms
community
. Use synonyms
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, Linking Words
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an increased
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teenagers
who are responsible among the population could reduce the Use synonyms
rate
of juvenile Use synonyms
crime
in the Use synonyms
community
. Many young Use synonyms
adolescents
are involved in Use synonyms
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activities
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of participating Linking Words
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in social
activities
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such
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and robberies
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community
. Correct article usage
the community
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, the juvenile Linking Words
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rate
in the Use synonyms
community
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well-raised
teenagers
. In conclusion, it can be clearly deduced that Use synonyms
crime
rates could be reduced in Use synonyms
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community
as there are more responsible Add an article
the community
teenagers
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community
. Use synonyms
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crime
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rate
could be mitigated and that may benefit the society.Use synonyms
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
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