Increasingly, many young people are deciding to work or study in other countries. What are the causes of this phenomenon? Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

Nowadays, it is
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inevitable that starting professional life far from a home becomes a trend. Affordable travelling and living cost makes it extremely hard to resist for
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youngsters to try something new and exciting. It has never been
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time to take advantage of moving out early and
people
who already tried it, often
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it. Metropolitan
cities
tend to attract more young
people
than smaller
cities
. They offer larger universities, more qualified and
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jobs as well as a wider variety of communities one could join. All these things combined propose to
people
that they can live
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and more balanced life. The side-effect of the movement of young
people
to the other areas significantly affects their hometowns which are
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talented and
courageos
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teenagers to the more attractive places.
This
migration
further
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the chance of smaller
cities
to compete with metropolitans in attracting investors and money
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. Young
people
seeking new opportunities definitely earn a new set of skills by moving to more attractive areas. More attractive
cities
for young
people
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from their talent and
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capacities.
On the other hand
, a small percentage of young professionals
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back to their hometown and
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new ideas, points of view and skillset to the place that needs
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. I think
this
benefits all the parties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Interconnected
  • Higher education
  • Prestigious institutions
  • Research facilities
  • Career advancement
  • International experience
  • Resume
  • Cultural exchange
  • Immerse
  • Broaden worldviews
  • Economic factors
  • Unemployment
  • Quality of life
  • Standards of living
  • Healthcare
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