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Countries ate becoming more and mote similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

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It is true that globalization has made the world a global village.
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, the nations become more and more similar as the global market spreads out widely and everybody has access to easily buy everything they want at any time and anywhere.
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 issue has beneficial sides while there are negatives either, and both sides will be debated in the following paragraphs . According to the progression of high-speed technologies, online marketing has become more popular and reachable
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 every part of the world.
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, people can purchase all the items and amenities they desire through the internet even though the products are established
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 the other side of the globe. Increasing similarities among countries
reduces
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 the cultural diversities and
discriminations
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 individuals.
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, it has lessened the boundaries between nations and the whole world seems to become
united
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 one.
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, every nation has its own nationality, culture, traditional
heritages
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heritage
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 and symbols. Tending to
similarity
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the similarity
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 among countries makes their distinct features which have existed from the very beginning.Citizens wearing the same trendy clothes and cities having similar infrastructures would lead to
disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of patent characteristics of nations. In conclusion, since benefits and disbenefits always come as a package, there might be some drawbacks
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indicated
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 opinion too.
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, it is clear that
developing
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 in merchandising aspects
help
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 a lot to
fulfill
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 people’s desires and
making
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make
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 the earth
to
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become one family as we all are just the same humans with no exception.
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