Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

Nowadays, there are many ways to improve yourself, and numerous individuals try to learn from influencers who appear regularly on TV or in magazines. In my experience, It is a useful way for the younger. Famous people often have significant success in their careers. They do not only work well but
also
influence their colleagues and their generation with their positive attitude and innovative thoughts. Bill Gates, whom I saw on TV in 2000, is not only a founder of Microsoft, which is the world's biggest software company, but
also
an environment protector, and a great charity. I have read about him for many years and try to live like him, think like him.
Secondly
, popular people can control their emotions well under pressure and respond
techniques
Change preposition
to techniques
show examples
in difficult situations. It s a huge pressure
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
when they are in front of the camera and under the detected eye of others, but they still act rationally, sometimes perfectly. Tran Thanh is my favourite comedian who is famous for his humorous sense, great communication skills, and perfect response to his issues with anti-fans. In 2019, an anti-fan girl shared some fake news about him on youtube and Facebook, which made his lost some contracts, he came to her home with his lawyer and made a fair conversation with her,
showed
Wrong verb form
showing
show examples
her the right thing and accepted her apology.
Although
this
girl did wrongly, he still treated her fair. In
this
media century, we can see many popular on tv or in magazines, who are often successful and have influenced lifestyles, and we can learn many from them.
Submitted by ntlanh92 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: