Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

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Nowadays, there are many ways to improve yourself, and numerous individuals try to learn from influencers who appear regularly on TV or in magazines. In my experience, It is a useful way for the younger. Famous people often have significant success in their careers. They do not only work well but

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influence their colleagues and their generation with their positive attitude and innovative thoughts. Bill Gates, whom I saw on TV in 2000, is not only a founder of Microsoft, which is the world's biggest software company, but

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an environment protector, and a great charity. I have read about him for many years and try to live like him, think like him.

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, popular people can control their emotions well under pressure and respond

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when they are in front of the camera and under the detected eye of others, but they still act rationally, sometimes perfectly. Tran Thanh is my favourite comedian who is famous for his humorous sense, great communication skills, and perfect response to his issues with anti-fans. In 2019, an anti-fan girl shared some fake news about him on youtube and Facebook, which made his lost some contracts, he came to her home with his lawyer and made a fair conversation with her,

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her the right thing and accepted her apology.

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girl did wrongly, he still treated her fair. In

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media century, we can see many popular on tv or in magazines, who are often successful and have influenced lifestyles, and we can learn many from them.

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Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

Fully explain your ideas

There is more and more outrage and anger common in society today. Why is this? is this a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that family has the most powerful influence on a child’s development, while others think that other factors such as television, friend, music have the biggest effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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1.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package

Some people feel that learning a foreign languageis an essential component of a child's education. Others feel that learning a foreign language is often a waste of time that can be better spent on learning technologyand other vocational subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.