The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
believe that
people
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not necessarily
enroll
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in a university or at other academic institutions to be successful as the qualities and
skills
can be learned. I totally disagree with
this
notion.
This
essay will summarize why it is important to be educated in a
school
or institution.
Students
are admitted to the
school
to be educated and learn the qualities and
skills
of being a professional which makes them
to
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be successful.
For instance
, student nurses are being taught
on
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how to insert a cannula
to
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into
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their patients. A competency skill is needed if the technique is the correct
way
. As
such
,
this
skill is needed for the safety of the patients. If the practice is not the correct
way
,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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will not be
expert
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experts
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in their field.
Furthermore
, studying in
the
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universities or colleges is a
way
of interacting with
people
and
this
is a
way
of learning the values of other
persons
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in
such
a
way
that spending with them will be giving the person
other perspective
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another perspective
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in
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life.
On the other hand
,
people
tends
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to ignore the education given by the teachers in
school
because nowadays the proliferation of using
internet
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is widely used by the
students
.
For example
,
students
watch Youtube
to
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learn the
skills
of cooking in which there is
a
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simple
instruction
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instructions
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on how to cook.
Consequently
, they will master the recipe and be a successful person. In conclusion, there are advantages of studying in a
school
or university wherein
students
will acquire the qualities and
skills
to be successful and famous.
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