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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. In your letter Explain why you want to do voluntary unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful Give details of when you would be available for work

To the director, I am Nimal Pathirana
who
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am living
Kandy
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in Kandy
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where
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 close to the museum. I have heard that you are looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid
work
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. I would like to do some voluntary unpaid
work
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 at
museum
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the museum
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. Until
begin
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 my University studies, I can join
with
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you. I wonder if you can give me
this
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 chance due to it makes me feel happy. Generally, I would like to
voluntary
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do voluntary
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work
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. As well as, I have a lot of experience
for
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in
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 voluntary works
such
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 as I gave my voluntary support for
public
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the public
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 library
2019
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in 2019
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 and
city
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 council festival
for
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 2021. I can handle any severe conditions and I can get any responsibilities. I prefer to
work
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 as a team because I am
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a well
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well known
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 person
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as
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 how to
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work
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 with others. I am willing to give my support on afternoons due to I
am occupy
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 with my university studies most of the day.
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Additionally
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 I can come
weekends
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at weekends
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 after 2.00 p.m. because I am doing
a
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tuition classes for Grade 11 students in the mornings. I hope
your
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 immediate response
please
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. Yours sincerely Nimal Pathirana

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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