Task 1 Academic Graph charts show various activities in a US office in 1980 , 2000

Task 1 Academic

Graph charts show various activities in a US office in 1980 , 2000
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The given pie charts illustrate the amount of
time
spent on different activities in an American office in the years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, it is clear the usage of phone calls
were
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was
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high and the least
time
spent on the computer in 1980.
Whereas
in 2000, consumption of
time
was maximal,
Furthermore
the email category was in minimal usage and there
was
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were
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no big changes in other activities. Looking at the details of
pie
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the pie
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charts, in 1980, a fifth of
time
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the time
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consumption
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was on paper documents and meetings(20%),
while
time
spent on computers was an insignificant portion(2%).
Likewise
, face-to-face communication and other activities took around 15%
time
each.
However
, in 2000,
time
spent on phone calls and paper documents decreased sharply to 14% to 10% respectively.
Similarly
, the
time
spent on meetings reduced considerably from 19% to 9%.
However
, the usage of computers escalated dramatically from 2% to 30% in the two decades.
Email
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The email
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option was not there in 1980, but it took away 8% of office
time
in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • traditional activities
  • digital activities
  • emergence
  • significant changes
  • technological progress
  • business practices
  • evolving communication methods
  • surprising findings
  • shaped
  • speculate
  • observed data
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