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Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#driver #education #habits #punishments #offences
Some people opine that it is better to raise the awareness of drivers about driving safely is much
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 than punishing them. Personally,
although
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first
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at the same
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 heavy punishments are real
enquirements
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requirements
 for road
safety
. On the
first
 hand, It is undeniable that an important amount of the
vehicle's
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 accidents around the world are done by
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unconscious
unconcious
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unconscious
 individuals about the
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potential
potentioal
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potential
 dangers of exceeding the speed limits of the roads or breaking laws related to their and
others
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safety
.
Therefore
,
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 their eyes about the detrimental consequences of
this
 behaviour ,
such
 as driving without fasting their seat builts or even seating their kids
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 them in the front seats, would certainly lower the alarming figures of the accidents recorded annually.
On the other hand
, I believe being
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strict
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strict
 and firm is an important key to
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control
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people
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 behaviour as
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beng
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being
lenent
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lenient
 with some would not mitigate
this
 problem.
istead
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instead
 the numbers would go up to higher levels if there were no
detternet
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deterrent
 punishments To conclude, the
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aforementioned
aforementiond
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aforementioned
 points clearly illustrated the importance of
both
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raising
people
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 awareness especially the youth about their own
safety
 and the
second
 road users and at the same time keep monitoring the roads by using advanced technology to
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control
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road
safety
 as much as possible.
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