Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people opine that it is better to raise the awareness of drivers about driving safely is much
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than punishing them. Personally,
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heavy punishments are real
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hand, It is undeniable that an important amount of the
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accidents around the world are done by
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dangers of exceeding the speed limits of the roads or breaking laws related to their and
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them in the front seats, would certainly lower the alarming figures of the accidents recorded annually.
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the numbers would go up to higher levels if there were no
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raising
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awareness especially the youth about their own
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road users and at the same time keep monitoring the roads by using advanced technology to
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