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In the past lectures were the only method of teaching to a large number of students. Technology has brought tremendous changes. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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In the modern era,
technology
 is
thing
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 that can not be separated from
people
's lives. It impacts educational methods on how
people
 get an education, it is not only limited to lectures in the class but could be online.
This
 essay will discuss both of advantages and disadvantages of
technology
 in education.
First
,
technology
 brought simplicity to both students and lecturers to access materials. As easily to save material in cloud storage and simplify lecturer to share with all students.
Secondly
,
technology
 makes the way of study more interesting with the features.
Lastly
,
technology
 helps
people
 to make everything fast to access. On
other
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hands
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, not only benefit but
technology
 bring some negative impact. From a cost perspective, using the newest
technology
 would be more costly than non-
technology
. View from an infrastructure perspective, all areas or schools need to improve and standardize
technology
, but in actuality ,not all schools are capable to follow the standard. In summary,
technology
 brought both positive and negative
impact
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, at the ,end it
ondepend
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depend
on depend
 how
people
 maximize
technology
 to support education. But from my view, it more brings benefit which can simplify all aspect on educational.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tremendous changes
  • diverse learning styles
  • enhances
  • fosters
  • continuous learning
  • digital divide
  • face-to-face interaction
  • critical thinking skills
  • over-reliance
  • potential for distraction
  • attention spans
  • infrastructure
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