Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive is it a positive or negative development?

Wedding
parties
in several countries
is
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becoming fancy and costly
in
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these days. These events are one of the most important and memorable
day
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in everyone's life but not every couple is able to take place by the sound of it. So I strongly believe that it has
adverse
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effect
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because of
money
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influence
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our society and culture. One important problem is that when the cost of
wedding
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the wedding
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party is becoming expensive many women and men prefer to stay single. So if it happens, the rate of single people raises and it is an
issues
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for our society.
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, in several countries where the cost of wedding
parties
are
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becoming expensive,
rate
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the rate
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of birth is decreasing so in the future their population is getting older and their countries
is
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becoming small and weak. For
this
reason, spending
huge
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amount of
money
for
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wedding
parties
is not
wise
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decision. Another important problem is that the cost of wedding
parties
has a negative impact on the couple's life. As we know marriage party is costly. Many couples are not wealthy to afford
paying
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for many things for their weddings
such
as a place, wedding dress, cake, food, music band and other necessities. If they do not have enough
money
, they have to borrow it from a friend or take a bank loan for
this
event. After
that
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they should pay it back with interest.
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, spending
huge
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a huge
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amount of
money
for
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wedding
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a wedding
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party is not reasonable.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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