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Every country should produce enough of everything that the country needs so it should not rely on imports. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Nowadays people are more effective to buy others country product.
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 partially agree with
this
 statement because of some specific reason. Generally speaking that most of the time citizen attract with other country culture like food clothes .
first
 of all if people buy
this
 product they will be attached that things.
moreover
 like
countries
 import varieties of clothes they can earn their own citizens money. On the other
side
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 all
countries
 people indeed export
others
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 products cause
of
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they need other
countries
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countries'
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 support.
Although
 , they can import some products
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from others
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others
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 county
but
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I think it is not enough for them.all
countries
 can not import all things behind the reason is lack of proper
machine
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lack
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 of
intelligence
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 employe. In conclusion,

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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