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Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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Nowadays, the popularity of people
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 overseas
films
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 more increased rather than
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 who loved to see domestic
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. In
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 essay, we will discuss why these phenomena happen and the government’s contribution to promoting local
movies
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. Numerous people believe that attending foreign created by foreign producers specifically if these producers already have well famous movie is better than watching local
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. To be more particular, It is
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regularly
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regularly
 watched that international pictures consist
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 visual
effect
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 and amazing animation which without a doubt improve the film’s quality and attract the audience.
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movies
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 like Spiderman, Batman, and Avatar have been watched by millions of individuals around the since
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 tremendous digital animations.
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 what makes local
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 unable to compete in quality because they are still far behind in producing
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visual effects and music. Certainly, local governments ought to finance and empower the local producers to promote
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show
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 to the public. Undoubtedly, every country has gifted artists, movie makers, or directors who cannot demonstrate themselves or give their best
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the
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 lack of financial support. These groups should be given a chance to show their abilities. With financial support, the groups upgrade their equipment and other tools for motion
pictures
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 making. It can assist the visual and realistic quality of effects. On a final note, governments should give more attention and support to
local
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films’
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 industry. So, it can attract a bunch of people to watch the best
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 made by their own citizens and compete with international
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cinematic expertise
  • Diverse narratives
  • Enriching cultural experience
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cinematography advancements
  • Government subsidies
  • Promote local talent
  • Economic sustainability
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