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Nuclear power is a necessary evil. Despite the potential human and environmental consequences of radioactivity fall out, nuclear is genuine alternative to non-renewable energy sources like oil and coal, which are quickly running out. In sort, the benefits of nuclear power for outweigh the risks of using it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the nations which are recognised as Nuclear
state
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 carry a strong influence in the world and some countries have experienced consequences of radioactive fallout and potential hazards to
human
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humans
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. some say
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that
they
thay
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that
 nuclear
energy
 is a genuine source of
energy
 to alter the use of
energy
 sources like oil and coal that outweigh the advantages despite the risk of using it. I will lean towards the disagreement
of
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 the given statement by stating some points with supportive examples.
To begin
 with, Nuclear power is one of the hazardous
weapon
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weapons
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 of the country
that is
 hidden and kept only for wars and is used for
generation
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the generation
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 of electricity in
the
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apply
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distinct countries.
Furthermore
,
decomposition
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the decomposition
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 of
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radio-active
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radio active
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radioactive
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 material is time taking process
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up to
upto
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 100 years.
For instance
, The consequence of
nuclear
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the nuclear
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 bomb
drop
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drops
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in
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on
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 Hiroshima and Nagasaki during the
second
 world war can be seen as the people still getting
diagonsed
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diagnosed
 with radioactive particles.
In addition
, it has been inherited in the genes of the people living in Japan
that
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resulted
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 in deformed body shape.
Secondly
,
many
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 research
are
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 being conducted nowadays to use the radioactive waste which is kept intact far from the city areas.
However
, the extraction of
energy
 is not difficult
instead
 it is uncontrollable when used due to unstable characteristics when revoked.
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,
the
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 scientist
in
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is
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 one of the prestigious
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university
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universities
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 of the United States
,
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 has found
the
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a
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 way that It can be implemented for personal use in the form of
battery
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the battery
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 pack. Soon the
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research
reseearch
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research
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was called-off
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called-off
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called off
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 due to
sudden
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 rise in temperature during operation.
Hence
, it was not usable as it requires strong preventive measures and isolated conditions. In conclusion, Nuclear power is an option but
still
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 it requires
lot
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 of research to run under
the
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sustainable conditions
and
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also
 we have seen the consequences when emitted even by mistake.
Therefore
,
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despite
dispite
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despite
 outweighing advantages, nuclear power has
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disastrous
disasterous
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disastrous
 drawbacks.
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