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Many shopping malls have been built in different countries all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for the local people?

In the contemporary epoch, there is irrefutable debate among folk about window shopping
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 that owing to numerous upsides
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 as a wide range of products for consumers and accessibility. My perspective is that
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 outweigh the demerits. In
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 copious folk who argue that the benefits of Shopping Malls considerably outweigh their disadvantages. The most preponderant is that beyond doubt numerous varieties of items
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, Presently customers prefer to acquire the basic products from a shop.
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 to
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, there are numerous other benefits in various fields. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only does one benefit more when it comes to being effective, but they can enhance productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease, efficacy, and convenience. Needless to say, all these merits stand out in good stead, as far as augmenting the chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned.
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, Another pivotal factor in the aforementioned proposition is that it is only likely to help one thrive and excel in varied areas.
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, when only one follows a system, can they broaden their horizons,
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 dedication and perseverance.
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 a result, it is apparent why myriad is not in the patronage of shopping malls. to cite an example, small retailers and markets gradually vanish.
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, the downsides of the stated topic are not undeniable. In
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 quarrels.
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 there are some non-negligible negative impacts of massive departmental stores.
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, the festivity or fruitful advantages it beholds in it far outweigh the ill effects.

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task response
Ensure the essay is focused on the given topic and that both sides of the argument are adequately addressed.
coherence cohesion
Use clear and logical progression of ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear topic and all sentences in the paragraph should relate to that topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Retail industry
  • Urban development
  • Consumer culture
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Social interaction
  • Commercial hub
  • Local entrepreneurship
  • Environmental impact
  • Traffic congestion
  • Job creation
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