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full time students spend a lot of time studying. Do you agree or disagree

#time #students
According to my
research
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 I discovered that university students spent a lot of
time
 studying. Making them to spent little
time
 on other
activities
such
 as sports, family gatherings or going to movies
therefore
 it is believed that a student must study hard in order for him or her to pass the exams . So in most
cases
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 u find out that they spent a lot of
time
indoor
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than outdoor. Here in
africa
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were
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 I come from
to graduate
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 as a university student is considered
as
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a bigger life achievement so when you start studying you have to prove that you can be a winner Making it difficult for a student to have a social life like doing so.many
activities
 . I strongly support that one should spend more
time
 studying to prepare for the coming exams for you to pass.
On the other hand
 when we look deep into it every human being nid
time
 to rest and refresh Making it possible for university students to have
time
 for other
activities
 for an example going out with friends watching football movies playing sports visiting your family members to refresh your mind and at least think about other things on that available
time
 . So it is wise to give yourself some
time
 to do other things I find it very healthy than spending a lot of hours alone and studying so I agree that they should do other
activities
.
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